In the spirit of boredom, creativity, or some odd combination of the two, I’ve decided to start writing a fairy tale. It’s my first ever, and I’m writing it in an open, “this is what popped into my head first” fashion. Note that everything you read is a DRAFT, a WIP (work-in-progress), and I’m posting it that way so that I can get comments and feedback about what I should do with it. So let me know if you want changes here or there, or what you what to see happen next, anything.
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It is said, that when the world came to be, Time had the mannerisms of an incredibly energetic child. Bouncing back and forth, to and fro, often changing it’s mind about the way things went here, or how this was said there. He had a devilish sort of attitude, breaking all the rules and making all the other BLAHS* jealous (especially Fate…afterall, how was one to decide how things were going to be in the distant future if you always had Time to go around messing things up?).
Sadly though, as Time grew older, he settled down with a rather nice lady and unfortunately, lost the oomph from his younger days. As the millennia went on, the spark in Time slowly died until one day, he up and kicked the bucket (afterwards, Fate threw a party, saying it was “destined to be” and other such nonsense. Not many BLAHS showed up though…they decided to use what was left of Time wisely…and no, it didn’t involve a barbecue).
When Time died, his body shattered (slowly, in an overly dramatic fashion) into billions of tiny rectangles (Time’s favorite shape). Each of the rectangles was incredibly thin, thinner even than paper, and on each one was a depiction of a different moment or series of events in history. It is on one of these “slices” of Time , if you will, that our story takes place…
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* I haven’t come up with a name for the collective members of creation and emotions or whatever (Fate, Future, Apathy…etc). Suggestions welcome.
The idea with this fairy tale is to keep things relatively simple, so that the reader doesn’t have to waste brain power on memorizing complex names and can just dive in to the story and enjoy it. All this, while still maintaining some originality and, of course, a decent sense of humor. That’s the intro, and it’s open to praise and/or criticism.
Soooo, i hope you dont mind, but im going to copy and paste my comment from messenger, just pretend it’s the first time you’re going to read them!
“I lke the concept of your intro, personifying time. Also, I was ready to dwelve right into your fairytale!”
teehee.
Im kinda excited you have another website up, i always enjoyed reading your posts, and now i will be able to read stories!
Hooray!
damn that’s awesome, i want more, now, now, NOW! =b
That was incredibly amazing. Of course you would come up with such a cute n’ clever idea
I hope, that there will be more to come in the NEAR future… No pressure 
Very good. ^^
I liked the way you’ve wrote that and the story can take various directions thanks to the way you’ve wrote the beginning. As for the BLAHS, I can’t quite think of a name to give them… Keep this up, it will (probably) be something really good! ^^
I was gunna copy and paste this other story that reminded me of that one but I cant find it.
Ummm I love your first two sentences.
And how Time likes rectangles – maybe because I’m a 4 year old with ADHD.
I would name the BLAHS gidgets.
No.
Um.
Creations.
Beings.
Underlings.
Offspring.
Children.
Titans.
I have no idea.
Write more so I can grammar edit it.
even though im not a big fan in the literature scene, i do have an appreciation for good writing especially since when i read the comics its got to have a good ongoing story, this also has potential to do that, so plz continue the fairytale!